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A Short Bit about Old Movies, Old Faithful, and the Things We Do for Love

Note: Another snippet from my work-in-progress novel “Cruise Control”, wherein my partner, Terry, has been temporarily felled by gastro-intestinal malfeasance during said cruise. He has just requested that Tiffany and I retrieve his besmirched garments out of the cabin bathroom and run them through the wash. We do so, with considerable reluctance. The only background detail you might need to know is that, in a previous scene, Jesus had knocked on the door in search of a mysterious map. Once again, just go with it…


The entry portal to the contamination scene whacked open with an ominous thud.

“After you,” I said to Tiffany, firmly thrilled that there was still a minimalist degree of etiquette in some parts of some societies. Courtesy can be a good thing, especially when it came to avoiding odious tasks where your life may or may not be in danger.

Tiffany was not buying it. “Aw, hell no. It’s your boyfriend. You can clean up after him. I’m just here to look pretty.”

Terry, from the bed: “Oh, grow up. I already told you that I rinsed everything out. It’s all in a little pile on the shower floor. Just pick it up and put it in the plastic bag I left right there and then get the hell out of here before my lava cap breaks again.”

We approached the shower like those astronauts in that “Alien” movie, just a few minutes after they have finally figured out that something very unfriendly has begun eating the lesser members of the cast. “Little pile” is not quite the phrase I would have used for what we encountered on the dank tile. It was a rather startling mound of wetness composed of more clothing than one could possibly wear in two full months. (Had Terry felt compelled to change outfits for every round of retch-and-blow? What exactly happened while we were gone?)

I sighed. Tiffany sighed. The commode burbled to the toilet paper dispenser about the wretchedness of the last several hours. (“That ass just kept comin’ at me!”)

Tiffany reached down to pick up the promised plastic bag, one large enough that I briefly pondered where Terry might have found such a thing. She popped it open with such a degree of skill that I also pondered how she had gained experience with what looked like a body bag. (I’d best keep my eye on her.) She then nodded her head at the soggy mass of what had once been couture. Are you just going to stand there or what?

I took a deep breath (mistake), wrapped my arms around the whole mess (second mistake), and then hoisted. (It was still warm. I really wasn’t expecting that. My intellect tried to convince me that Terry had simply used hot water and that’s all that it meant; my emotion was convinced that whatever had geysered out of Terry was now breeding, creating a mulch garden of fetidness that would fell me within seconds. I groaned, pivoted toward Tiffany and her professionally-opened body bag, and released the Krakken. There was a squalid squelch, followed by Tiffany briskly tying the end of the plastic bag, using a clever knotting technique she had learned in a place that I had apparently never been.

“I feel so dirty,” I moaned.

Terry: “I can still hear you.”

Tiffany: “Let’s just get this done.”

Me: “And then we will start drinking.”

Tiffany: “Continue drinking. There’s really no need to be modest at this point.”

Terry: “You guys have already been drinking?”

Me: “Of course not.”

Tiffany: “Nope.”

Terry: “Liars.”

Me: “Okay, maybe a little.”

Tiffany: “Couple gallons or so.”

Terry: “I can’t believe that while I’m laid up you guys have been off guzzling like drunken whores and… oh, Jesus.”

Me: “Is he back at the door?”

Tiffany: “He must want that map really bad.”

Terry: “No. It’s comin’ around the bend again. You guys better get out of there. Now. Run for your lives.”

The commode began crying.

The toilet-paper dispenser offered him a tissue.

We ran.

Well, actually, we clumsily bounced off each other and tripped over one another as we clawed our way out of the cabin, lugging a bag that suddenly felt like a family of four had moved in and brought along some cattle. Once the outer door had slammed shut on Terry’s screams of agony and propulsion, we began the slow trek down the unending hallway, dragging the detritus of dysentery. In a Charlie Chaplin movie, this would have been a poignant tableau. In real life, it was just sad.

We eventually arrived at a communal laundry room that I had noticed during one of my previous sprees, an unsatisfying mission wherein I had been seeking an ice dispenser. (My initial thoughts upon encountering this den of domesticity: Well, I’ll never use this place. Oh, the lies we tell ourselves.) The first thing I noticed as we clattered in is that a small boy gasped at our arrival and then slammed shut the lid of a washing machine. He raced past us and out the door, muttering something, the language unidentifiable but the tone crystal clear: Beasts of Hell had just appeared and the only sane thing to do was run for the border and hope you don’t get gored by a rabid goat.

Tiffany: “That was a bit much. Could he smell the clothes or the alcohol?”

Me: “I’m guessing neither. Based on my own actions at his age, there’s something in that washing machine that we don’t want to know about. Don’t open it.”


Previously shared, slight changes made. For those of you who keep careful notes during your visits to Bonnywood (I imagine such in my fervid nightly dreams), “Cruise Control” is my gestating novel that is so massively wordy at this point that it takes 20 minutes for my laptop to save the file. Which means I need to do some equally massive editing, and it’s entirely possible that this scene will never be seen again. So, treasure it in your hearts, forever, or at least until you close the window and move on to another blog…



23 replies »

  1. My sympathy is totally with the bed and throne ridden Terry. Because I’ve been there (sans the over abundant use of alcohol and/or cruise ship food) and we must all support each other. (at a distance if the fumes are toxic)… I’m sure he was mortified at having to use every single last piece of holiday wear because he’d sullied the rest. It’s a good lesson to remember: NEVER trust a fart. EVER. Particularly not on cruises where one has raided the endless buffet table(s) and someone forgot to put the shrimp mayonnaise on ice or in a cooler. And where there’s tequila….

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    • Trust, I went through my own Dance with Dysentery shortly after this incident, along with Tiffany. The two of us only had to put up with the one of him, then it reversed and he had to be up with the two of us. It was NOT pretty…


  2. Reminds me of the winter Ben and I passed a GI Kootie back and forth. One bathroom… 😱 Terry was lucky to have companions to take care of the details so he could pray for death in peace, even if they were inebriated Keystone Cops in training.😆

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    • You hit the nail on the end with the last five words. We didn’t bother to stop drinking during the whole ordeal (it was a CRUISE, damn it), so we were not exactly professional in our ministrations…

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  3. As much as I admire what you (and/or your character) did in the name of love, I am more impressed with what Terry (and/or his character) allows to be written in the name of love. Or has he not read this yet? 😉

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    • I’m sure he hasn’t read this post, but I’m fairly certain he’s had a gander at previous versions. I would say his thoughts on my Terry-sharing writing do not include the words “approval” or “delight” but do include the phrases “sighing resignation” and “at least he can cook”… 😉

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